The story line is great! It has a couple of twists in the story to keep me reading and waiting in suspense for the next chapter !
I come across some serious grammar mistakes, mixing up he and she and occasionally even a wrong plural they. It makes it really confusing the the dialogue when he or she starts to think, it needs to be deciphered who is meant.
I would happy correct while I am reading a long, sire others would be free and willing to do so as well!! I would love to see an improvement in the book since the story line is that good!